[Fic] Look What the Wind Brought In

[chibikanakonyu.livejournal.com]

Title: Look What the Wind Brought In
Words: 299
Prompt: Transparent
Pairing: ZoSan
Rating: PG (for suggestiveness?)

A whistling breeze swept over the decks of the Merry, making Zoro's golden earrings chime together softly. It brought with it the small sounds of ice cubes clinking against a tall glass filled with sweet, fruity cocktail, the clicking noises of a screwdriver turning on a spiraled screw, the sound of a page in an old book being turned, and also some faint snoring and sleep-talking. All mixing momentarily with the noises of wet fabric being shaken out in the wind, the smell of soap and cigarette smoke wafting in the air from near him.

Another swig of his booze, it buzzing and prickling on his tongue in just the right way. Not too big of a gulp, though. He wanted it to last until the waiting was finally over.

He lifted the bottle to his lips again and again, just to glance though the green glass towards the silhouette behind the bedsheets just being hanged to dry, almost transparent in the sunlight.

Zoro stilled as he heard new sounds gradually carried his way by the salty breeze. High-heels clicking on the wooden boards, before a shutting of a cabin door. Various clacking and jingling, accompanied by a strained grunt, heavy footsteps indicating that something heavy was being carried below deck. A book closing, and the fading sounds of retreating, measured steps. Sleepy sounds, before the creaking of the wooden ladder leading down below deck.

The bottom of the empty bottle touching the flooring softly. The thud of boot-soles on wooden planks and swords being adjusted. Leisurely taken steps towards a slender blond doing laundry, the man's low humming increasing in volume more and more as approached.

His hands on the slim waist, thumbs hooking into the leather belt straining around it.

An impure kiss behind freshly washed clothing.

Comments

[xarciel.livejournal.com]

Awwww~ That was cute, and very serene. The way you described all the sounds was very relaxing, and I could almost feel the light wind washing across the deck of the Merry.

This fic is definitely as awesome example of how powerful writing can be when you show a scene, instead of just telling us about it. <3

[chibikanakonyu.livejournal.com]

Oh goodness... >////< Thank you so much for your comment~ I was sure I became kind of rusty by now, so I'm really-really happy you enjoyed reading it~ <3

[summer-tempests.livejournal.com]

This was lovely and vivid. I could almost hear a soundtrack of Straw Hat life clinking and tinkling away as I read; the smells enhanced it wonderfully. And randomly, this line: He lifted the bottle to his lips again and again, just to glance though the green glass, seemed so so real to me, I was leaning against the railing and drinking from a green bottle myself.

Wonderful imagery! Thanks for writing this :D!

[chibikanakonyu.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for your kind comment~! I'm always giddy with delight if I get such a detailed feedback~ ^^

I was pretty much trying to get back on track, experimenting with letting the wind and the sounds and smells it carries have the main role, so your words were very encouraging and I'm very happy you enjoyed reading this little ficlet. <3

Now if you'll excuse me, I have to get this blush off my face... >////<

[slender-one.livejournal.com]

Ah, thanks for this. Really sweet and so soothing...i'm sure i'll be in a better mood next time i'll hang up the laundry ;) thanks fo this as well.

[chibikanakonyu.livejournal.com]

Heehee, that's nice to hear~ ;)
Thank you for reading and commenting~ <3