Late Lame "villainy" topic entry ....

[kotoshin.livejournal.com]

Give me a fluffy topic and I come up with angst. An angst/serious one, and I come up with fluff. My brain is cross wired.

Title: Variable Definition
Rating: PG
Word Count: 178
Pairing: Usopp/Luffy
Topic: Villainy




It was quiet and dark and with the warm body curled against his side and on his lap, Usopp didn't want to move. Unfortuneately, his captain wasn't as limp as he seemed.

"Usopp, what's a villainy?" Luffy's vocabulary wasn't big, but the lack of an occasional word still surprised the sharpshooter.

"Villainy is ... it's something villains DO!" That was the quickest answer he could think of, mind blanking. Damn the captain for asking the darnest questions during the post-coital cuddle.

"Oh. Okay. So what's a villain, then?"

"A villain is ... a despicable bastard! Who kills people!" What pirate didn't know the word? Granted, most stories portrayed PIRATES as the villains ... dammit, he was too muzzy to think. "Like Kuro or Crocodile!"

"Hn. So what they did was villainy, then, taking over a country, and trying to steal Kaya's money ..."

"Exactly right!" Usopp nodded, fighting drowsiness and the urge to sneeze. In the dark, a chin rested on his chest, hair tickling under Usopp's nose. Slowing, the steady breaths lulled Usopp.

"Zoro kills people. Does that make Zoro a villain?"

Comments

[monimonika.livejournal.com]

I think the drabble is good up until just before the last line. Luffy's first two questions can be seen as in-character (subjective, I know), and Usopp's responses are very believable (very good writing, by the way).

But that last line just doesn't seem to fit with Luffy. Or rather, the drabble ends much too early. By the way the drabble flows, the last line seems to be uttered with some sort of sadness.

But this is Luffy we're talking about here. I can imagine him asking the final question the same way he asked the first two questions, and when Usopp attempts to set things straight, Luffy would make some logically baffling statement that would make everything all right.

As it is now, the drabble just doesn't end well, mostly due to the kind of character Luffy is.

That's just my opinion, though.

[kotoshin.livejournal.com]

This is why I love this comm - the replies aren't just OMG I LOVE YOU TIS cute plz rite more.

XD There's actual C&C.

Yeah. It IS pretty contrived. My mind blanked out around there. (at the end of Luffy's line)
It's NOT easy following the strange leaps of Luffy-logic.

It mostly started with me bouncing the idea of "what other questions about life would be as nuts as Luffy asking about sex"? Mixed with the crew's each different interpretation of Villainy.


I'll probably play and expand on this idea later ... I have something similar fermenting in my brain, about how each of the crew would define villainy. It'll be fluff and angst combined, due to the crew's varied personalities.

This topic isn't HARD to write about - it's just hard for me to work any yaoi in it. I think I'll probably not bother for the next one. XD and just see where it takes me.