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[ptps.livejournal.com]

And so naturally ptps starts writing about W7-centric Lu/Uso angst. AGAIN. I'm sorry. ;___; SPOILERS FOR MOST REECENT CHAPTER.

Title: Scarlet
Word Count: 196
Pairing: Vague Luffy/Usopp
Topic: Black
Rating: PG
A/N: Choppy writing style and sort-of angst. Not happy.


Black

Like the curls of his hair

Black

Like his laughing eyes

Black

Like the bastard who’d tried to kill the mistress of his village

Black

Like the coffee he was absolutely forbidden to drink

Black

Like happy nights spent curled up in the nest together

Black

Like the Hairdo of Power he’d used to earn his nakama back

Black

Like the warm secrets they shared in the dark

Black

Like a color of hatred he’d never seen, wasn’t supposed to see in the other’s eyes

Black

Like the first night he spent gazing at the stars alone

Black

Like when he closed his eyes and found empty nothing

Black

Like feral agility, as he watched spots and stripes and rings blend together, too fast for him to properly counter

Black

Like his vest and shorts were now, hanging heavy with blood and sweat, dragging on his body like weights, like anchors, like despair

Black

Like being gutted alive

Black

Like the blood he was choking up, that wasn’t right, blood was supposed to be red

Black

Like finality

And someone won’t stop screaming for him.

“Luffy, wake up, wake up, please, oh god, wake up…”

Comments

[paxnirvana.livejournal.com]

Shivery, heart-achingly good. *wails and hugs them both*

Oda has firmly cemented my other fave OP yaoi pairing as Luffy/Usopp with this arc... *sniffles*

[yuki-kokoro.livejournal.com]

.............AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!

HOW CAN YOU DO THIS TO ME?!?!?! (I know, I know, 'cause Oda did it to you, but.... ;_______;) I am not current with the manga, though I've been reading spoilers continually and now it totally looks like I'm gonna spend my weekend frantically reading One Piece. 'CAUSE I NEED TO SEE THIS SO I CAN PROPERLY ENJOY THE COMING REUNION. OMG LUFFY. USOPP. ........*pulls out her hair in frustration*

If not this weekend it's the very very first thing on my list once I get back up to school and have a fast internet connection, but I really want to share in the rejoicing when it happens... it'll be like one giant fandom joygasm.

As for the writing (ya know, what I SHOULD be talking about), God, the repetition in this KILLS. You mixed the happy in with the heart-breaking and it just flashes through their relationship in this one awful blur of joy and having it ripped away and then Luffy lying broken and AHHHHHHHHH!!!!

I'M AT WORK AND I WANT TO SCREEEEAM!

[rab-rumrunner.livejournal.com]

I had to wait to read 5 things on this community because of spoilers : (
But they make me happy now that I can read them since I finally got the chapter. Damn, you school starts late. I just finished my 3rd week of classes. Maybe thats's a Midwest/East Coast thing.

Ussoooop ;____;

[vampire-otaku.livejournal.com]

The writing style you used for this one just WORKED. It was perfect. The story started out cute and sweet and all of a sudden the angst hit me like a ton of bricks and left me gasping for breath by the end.

Especially when he said that 'someone' wouldn't stop screaming for him, but not seeming to quite get who that 'someone' was under all the pain and blood loss and... and... *flails*

I <3 your angst. Now all we need is for the reunion to happen.

[orange-smaug.livejournal.com]

THERE CAN NEVER BE TOO MUCH USOLU ANGST, ESPECIALLY YOURS, DON'T YOU DARE SAY THAT. And the repetition and the ending and damn you for breaking my heart again D:.

[crystal-chan.livejournal.com]

...well, there went my heart. Damn, I'm gonna need more duck tape. Maybe some of the green kind, then I guess the taped together pieces can be slythrin colors or something...

But such a lovely drabble. So happy at the beginning, and then at the end just....guh.

So very perfect.

[mipeltaja.livejournal.com]

You needn't apologise, for it is beautiful angst. *cries a little and showers you with cookies*