[identity profile] maldoror-gw.livejournal.com posting in [community profile] onepieceyaoi100
Title: Sense Deprivation
Rating: G
Word Count: 237
Pairing: Um...LuffyxNakama? Though in my mind, considering his position in the list, there's a slight LuffyxZoro feel that rather snuck up on me.
Topic: Senses (Yes! I finally wrote one on topic! *cries with joy*)

[Edit: Oops, forgot to add, spoilers for the Davy Back fight]




Luffy figured it was called a knock-out because it felt like he'd been blown clean off the planet. He was floating about in the clouds; soft, fuzzy, pain-free clouds. It was actually kinda fun; Luffy wondered if this was what swimming felt like. He would have liked to enjoy it for a bit longer than a few seconds, but the stakes were too high. He had too much to lose.

Nami's scent, like tangerines.

The taste of Sanji's cooking.

Robin's calm common sense and level head.

Chopper's attentive look as he applied bandages over silly little injuries.

Usopp's grand tales of how he'd become a Great Warrior of the Sea tomorrow, just you wait and see.

The grip of Zoro's hand as he hauled Luffy back out of the water and put a rough arm around his captain's shoulders while the latter coughed up half the ocean.

And not to forget the Going Merry's Jolly Roger, their ship's sense of pride! He couldn't risk that.

That split-haired foxy-pirate moron, with his Davy Back fight, wanted to take one of Luffy's crew away from him. There was no way Luffy was going to take that lying down. The Straw Hat's captain would rather be bunged into a barrel and tossed into the deep, dark silent ocean, thank you very much.

Luffy forced his way back into a world of hurt and stood up again. And again. And again.



Date: 2006-10-20 08:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] plotbunny-tiff.livejournal.com
Though the lines He was floating about in the clouds; soft, fuzzy, pain-free clouds. It was actually kinda fun; Luffy wondered if this was what swimming felt like made my Writer chibi squirm happily, I was particularly struck (no pun intended) by the last line. It really drove the message home. This was well done, kudos to you. ^_^

Date: 2006-10-24 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] dethorats
You captured the essence of the final battle in the Davy Back fight so well here. It was always played as kind of silly but with all that Luffy had to lose the fight was actually pretty serious. And that really came through in this drabble.

This line, And not to forget the Going Merry's Jolly Roger, their ship's sense of pride! He couldn't risk that., just owned me.

Date: 2007-01-05 10:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kiyakotari.livejournal.com
...again. And again. And again.

I loved that.

Date: 2008-08-27 09:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] anyjen.livejournal.com
Really cute. :)

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