*Blushes furiously*

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Title: Not Yet
Author: Kingyo hanabi
Topic: Free

A/N:This is my first Smo/Ace. I hope its okay.

EDIT! I went back and corrected some spelling and grammar errors. ;)

 It was all Smoker could do to keep himself from killing the four men who delivered the rolled up carpet to his deck in the darkest hour before dawn.  His certainty that these men were simply following orders with no regard for the people or actions behind them was the only thing that stayed his hand. So he gritted his teeth as they dumped their burden unceremoniously on the deck, took their money and left. He ordered all hands on deck  to prepare the ship for immediate departure and waited patiently for the sailors tailing the delivery men to report back that they hadn't been followed, hadn't gone to report to anyone.

Only when the ship was under full sail and moving away from the lonely island at breakneck speed did he go down on his knees and tear the carpet open, revealing Ace's lifeless form. He gathered the younger man into his arms, bellowing orders to open the infirmary and rouse the ship's doctor as he tried to ignore the chill of the brat's skin and the way he lay limply, a dead weight in Smoker's arms.

He took three steps before he began to feel the drain, and looked down to see the edges of a sea stone collar peering out from beneath Ace's ragged hair. He swore softly, a cold and helpless rage filling his body. Ace might be out of prison, but he wasn't free yet.

Comments

[reflecttheother.livejournal.com]

Ouch. All I can say is ouch...(a good ouch, mind you, this is a good smo/ace).

[mishagirl.livejournal.com]

AW!! Ace! You can do it dude!!!

Nice...this begs for a sequal..

[kingyo-hanabi.livejournal.com]

I'm glad you guys liked it. I wrote it this morning in about fifteen minutes, and I just realized how full of errors it is. *le sigh* I need a beta. :(

[lilyoftheval5.livejournal.com]

OK! A painful moment, but with feeling well-conveyed.
Thank you.

[mr-redrum.livejournal.com]

I just want to tell you that you did a great job describing smoker sadness and rage-ness after he saw ace's condition...