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[nonoji.livejournal.com]

Title: By The Sink
Pairings: Zoro->Sanji->?
Rating: I never know
Wordcount: 229
Topic: Sinking
Notes: I'm not happy with this. It has no special twists or clever little quirks and it's all choppy and unoriginal and ...well here it is anyway. Zoro POV.



The last of the water gurgled down the drain and with the dishes finished, I no longer had a reason to be here.

You do not seem to notice or care that I have not moved. You wipe down the table on autopilot, your attention and emotions all focused on the sounds coming from outside. You close your eyes and pause as you hear him laugh on the deck with the others, wanting him to be here, wanting him to be where I am, wanting him to only laugh like that when you are alone with him.

I know, I understand see, because that is exactly how I feel for you.

My hands are still wet, and your neck looks so good to touch.

I expected you to resist me, but all you do is breathe and stare as my tongue slides against the roof of your mouth.

Maybe it’s the nerves, I don’t know but my skin feels numb, making it hard to distinguish which touches are mine when you start to respond to my desperation. Chaos takes over and it’s beautiful.

You are too proud to cry but I can still sense the self-hatred and guilt. I no longer care. I’m sinking low, down to the very bottom and I’m taking you with me, because in that way, at least I have something to share with you.

Comments

[mishagirl.livejournal.com]

Nice! My money is on Luffy...but wake up Sanji, Zoro is more satisfying!

[nonoji.livejournal.com]

Yeah I was actually thinking of Luffs when I wrote this but thought I would leave the third persons identity out because ...because yeah. I like being vague.
Thanks for commenting!

[horusguard76.livejournal.com]

I actually like it. The image of misery. And tow line in particular - "chaos takes over and it is beautiful" as well as "I’m sinking low, down to the very bottom and I’m taking you with me, because in that way, at least I have something to share with you."

The second one has also despaired possessive note to it which I like in this context. This is actually no love but more of a punishment for two lonely and miserable souls. And such things have their beauty as well. ;)

[nonoji.livejournal.com]

Thanks!
*hugs*
Actually, I'm just generally frustrated with myself as lately I can only write disturbing or depressing scenes as you probably could tell.
I'm so happy to be quoted though, it makes me feel like a badass writer!

[horusguard76.livejournal.com]

Awww, I'm sorry to hear that. I'm sure it is just a phase and will pass soon enough. *hugs*

Well, the way I see it; writing depressed stories can be very cool too. Imagine if "the man and the sea" by Hemingway would have a happy ending to it... no one would have read it! ;)

My pleasure, really! And you draw exceptionally well too! Wish I could do that. *envious*